Thursday, July 28, 2011
Monday, July 25, 2011
So this would be the tekkmages in the foreground, Parker on the left, and coming out of this nest of roots and branches comes the light figure of Masuyo.
I'm happy with all the other layouts you've done so far if you are. Page 15 and Page 16 are fighting shots between Sen and Ayamu, so if you want to do those layouts go for it! And so I'll layout the rest of the issue from page 17 onwards. Sound good?
Here's Page 14 with a slight adjust. I think the flow of the action is right, so all it needed was an establishing shot of them in the room with the tekkmages bowing on the ground in front of the 'sword in the motherboard.' In the BG of panel one high on a ledge is the little shadow of Sen. The rest of the backgrounds only need slight tweek.
Saturday, July 23, 2011
Ok we have a lot of posts and comments all over, so I just want to post here and try to clarify some things. I also want to respond to your ideas. I like the way you're thinking but I want to further explain some reasoning for the original ideas. Firstly, I don't want to lose the sword in the stone idea, and here's why. I want the TKMGK sword to be an ancient powerful artifact that he needs to re-awaken. I know it is an often used motif, but I think it's ok, it gives it a more firm mythological basis. I'm all for twisting the details and making them our own but I want to keep this. I feel like if Ayamu is gathering pieces of the sword and fitting them together as he goes- it takes all the impact away from the 'otherness' and ancient magical quality of the weapon- it cheapens it somehow. I also want that return to this spiritual magical place to be a big part of the story. After his adventuring inside the Tower is complete, and he has all of the element pieces- then he STILL needs to about face and fight his way back to Diso-jin. Again, if he's collecting the pieces as he goes, there's no reason for him to return.
I LIKE the idea that these element pieces are actually pieces of the sword though. Let's steer away from having element pieces AND TKMGK pieces though. That's getting too confusing for me. However, I'm all for making the element pieces actual PARTS of the sword. Maybe the sword in the stone thing is actually just a gigantic naked blade without a handle or hilt that is stuck inside a massive computer mother board. Ayamu will collect the fire piece- which can be the top horns of the hilt- and the earth piece- the bottom horns- the water piece can be the USB handle and the air piece can be the bottom part of the USB. He can fit them all together on the blade and then everything lights up and there's this big dramatic forming of the blade.
I don't think Sen should have any pieces. There are 4 elements, 4 Guardians, and 4 pieces. Sen was the warrior destined to wield the weapon- just as Ayamu is now. The Sen he meets now is a very mystical ghostlike thing. Is it a wraith? A Ghost in the Machine? Is it evil? Good? He will keep meeting it along his quest- this wraithlike silent shadow that seems to sometimes help and sometimes want to kill him. We need to keep Sen as mysterious as possible- and clearly delineate the separateness from the other Guardians. The Guardians have disappeared somewhere in the Tower for decades and the point is that the Tekkmages NEED Ayamu to gather everything to get the weapon back. Sen is an unreliable spirit thing and the Tekkmages cannot count on it. Whew! Does this make sense?? We are collaborators Luc, so of course we can still discuss these points but I just felt the need to further explain some of my reasoning.
Earlier, while doing some research in the Tarot realms I found this interesting article. Maybe we can adapt these shapes somehow into the TKMGK mythology?
Friday, July 22, 2011
Sen has the "M" piece and gives it to Ayamu, whom attaches it to his sword passed down from Parker. The "M" piece augments the swords power and allows for two elemental slots. So if Ayamu picks up a fire piece, slot it in, but if he has all four he can only slot for two, unless he picks up letter "G" and then its on!
Saturday, July 16, 2011
My idea for this, going back a few pages, is that the TKMGK was broken when Algernon was "defeated" and the Protectors, including Sen, each took a piece for safekeeping. So Ayamu has to quest for the elements and the TKMGK pieces. Can't make it too easy on him.
Sen has only one piece to the sword, no sword in the stone, no huddling protectors, just Sen, Ayamu and Oraku.
Thursday, July 14, 2011
This was the page that was really stalling me out in early readings. So it got the heaviest of edits. Basically Oraku is telling Ayamu that Janson is a clone of a clone of a dictator put into power by Algernon at the end of the Holocaust when Algernon was imprisoned and the TKMGK broken.
(if you can't read some spots let me know)
Wednesday, July 13, 2011
Wednesday, July 6, 2011
continuing with the panel-less, ending this page with "All for control of the Earth" because I'm keeping alot of the narrative here and running out of room. I will try to make up the half page of text with some edits on later pages, or with the splash that is now pushed back from four to five, BUT it definately will need a splash after all the information over the first few pages. Lets see where this goes before we revamp and start over, what say ye?